[Kaleidoscope revision] Colours | 10. Gather Up the Fragments that Remain

Chapter 10 of Colours (the first "book" of Kaleidoscope) has been revised and is now up at FanFiction.net.

This is the only chapter from the first part of Kaleidoscope that got more of a rewrite than just a revision. I stewed over this for a few weeks, and have made things a little tougher on poor Remus, but I sort of like the way it all came out. :)

Kaleidoscope (I): Colours
10. Gather Up the Fragments that Remain (3880 words | PG)
   [also on FF.N]

After the Department of Mysteries, after Bellatrix, after the Veil, Remus tries to get things done, and tries not to think about what he has lost. Especially when the news he has to deliver to Tonks might cost him her friendship as well.

• What has changed: This chapter starts with a scene that is merely a minor revision of the original single-scene ficlet “Gather Up the Fragments” from day_by_drabble. It also incorporates the first two St. Mungo’s scenes from an early metamorfic_moon story, “Clarity”. But there are three entirely new scenes, and the final St. Mungo’s scene has been completely rewritten as well. I wanted to give a better sense of Remus’s shattered mental state, and also make his behavio(u)r fit with an idea I developed in writing later chapters for this series—that he never really lets himself grieve for Sirius until the dam breaks after Dumbledore’s death a year later.

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