[Britpicking] Help?

[shimotsuki]

I have a favo(u)r to ask of any British English speakers who might happen to see this.

I've submitted my redandthewolf story Seeds of Suspicion to a fanfic archive site, and my (American English speaking) beta there informs me that the phrase to have gotten, in her words, "drives the Brits mad." (I think I once knew that, but then I forgot.)

Anyway, I apparently need help revising this bit to make it British-compliant. Any suggestions?

"It's just," Peter went on, fiddling with his bottle, "maybe there's a reason Remus hasn't been coming over here lately. Maybe he's gotten involved in something that—something that means he can't look us in the eye any more."

The intended meaning is something like he has become involved -- only I imagine I'd want something more colloquial than that for a butterbeer-imbibing Peter to say.

Many thanks!

Comments

[bratanimus.livejournal.com]

Just popping in to say hi, and that work has been stomping me flat of late. I will email you back posthaste. ;)

[shimotsuki.livejournal.com]

Hi back! Sorry to hear about the stomping-flat part, but e-mail is supposed to be for fun, not another cause of stress, so don't you dare worry about writing back. Whenever!

*goes back to mountains and heaps of papers to grade*

[bratanimus.livejournal.com]

Hee hee, I figured you'd understand, but still ... Thanks for understanding! :D